Short Story Comp

[Serenity]

Kay what you do it, write a short story (obviously) with a cool or mysterious or whatever plot, and me and (possibly if she wants to.....I've yet to ask) Jose will rank them... This is just for fun, for I have no prize...Can't think of one suitable on a site like this...yeah..
Rules:
No more then 360 words MAX ~Sorry thats the limit.~
yeah thats pretty much it..... Oh if you want to actually win something, send your story to [e-mail] through email or go to the website at www.youngwritersofcanada.ca . This is a real contest if you send it to the site, but if you chose to, it MUST be in by March 15th.

I wrote a story for the real compitition...Here it is..:

Missing; Me.

Running. That's the last thing I remember. I was running from something. No, someone. I was getting farther and farther away when, suddenly everything went black. Now here I am, in a little place called Wisterville. I don't know how I got here or when, or why I'm here. I just am.
My name is Eve Flanner. I'm seventeen and alone. I told you I was running, well that's all I can say. I just know someone wants me dead, and being me, that'll probably happen soon. My roommate tells me, if I think hard enough, I'm bound to remember something. God was she wrong.
Not only do I remember some of what happened, but I fall into a trance and re-live what happened! Like some sort of creepy movie where the lonely girl is cursed or something. Just this morning I was sucked it;

"Eve! Come on Eve, don't you trust me? Eve!" A voice called from a distance. It was familiar but I couldn't place who it was. I was crouched between to dumpster bins in an ally, waiting for the person to pass, but it never happened.
"Eve! Darling please!"
The voice called, getting closer. It was so close this time, I started to tremble. Suddenly, there were footsteps heading down the ally. I froze, barley breathing.
The footsteps stopped in front of me. I stood, my foot shooting out, kicking her in the gut, then grabbed her arm and twisted it away from her body, bringing her down,
"Who are you?" I growled.
She didn't answer me.

I shook my head at the memory, and continued on my way to school. As I rounded the last corner, I came face-to-face with the very same woman from my memory. Just as I realized who it was, there was a searing pain in my stomach. I looked down. There was a dagger sticking out of me. I looked to her face in agony before falling to the ground. Just before I blacked out of the world forever, I heard one last thing:
"I'm Sorry Eve...My baby girl"

The end XD

[Scarlet]

I was running in the forest, everything seemed a scary blur. Last thing I knew was that someone or something was chasing me. My life was at a deadline.... I skidded to halt the edge of a canyon. I was trapped! Hot breath was on my neck when I slowly turned around the most horrid creature was in my eyes. "Who are you and what have you done to my sister," I whispered softly. The beast growled at me and took a step closer. Our noses touched on the very spot before I heard these two words, "Mama help!" My only chance was to jump off, I had to save my sister but why wasn't she calling me! The beast stomped nearer to me. The ledge cracked, and then I felt myself slipping down to darkness. The river streamed beneath me like a deadly snake. Its current was ready to pull me away.... pull me away from my family. As I neared I couldn't bear to feel the pain... so I went limp. But before I knew it I was awake in this same forest. "Mama help!" a voice yelled. That voice was coming out of no other than me. I was at this same cliff with my head banged against the cold rough stone. I felt dizzy and saw the blood was trickling down my cheek. "Your mama is not here to save you.... she's not here my darling to save you," something cackled. "WHERE'S MAMA AND MY SISTER?!" I screamed. "Look to the sky," a voice hissed into my ear. I turned to see a giant black cobra staring at me. I was in panic as the snack slithered over me, its weight on my stomach influenced my breathing problem. The snake wrapped itself around me, not giving a care in the world that I was gasping for air. I saw a beast come up to me, that same one in my dream. It nodded as for the snake to go on but I was already suffocating. Then I turned to the ledge, and rolled off the edge. I saw the ground coming to me...and my mothers face.....

[Serenity]

This is rather good, though it has a few weak points - points that can be. Fixed and tweaked. I'm actually rather impressed Scarlet. Its good. 6

[Scarlet]

Thanks it was only a quick go through. I can usually type really great if I take my time at it If you don't mind can I do another story?

[Serenity]

Sure

[Scarlet]

Crap..... I had my school's work on this hard drive, I set it down, now its gone. :@ great. Anyway when I find it I might be able to put down my story. Wow. My good luck ends today. #_#